The Merciless Pen
A place for a would-be writer to post his musings.
28 August 2011
an idea is formed (excitement ensues)
Once again I've received some pleasantly positive reviews about my latest story, as well as some useful criticism. Those few of you who enjoy reading my work will be glad to know that I'll have another short story up here probably by next Saturday, and that I'm simultaneously working on a project of a slightly larger scale... More on that to come.
Speaking of next Saturday, I'm heading back to Athens for school! With the advent of school comes the advent of homework and studying, so I may be posting and writing slightly less, but my no means is this blog going to shut down. It's only a wee baby, still fraught with potential!
I'm very excited about the things I've been working on. I can't wait to show you all...
24 August 2011
sometimes I fulfill promises
As promised, here's a story.
EDIT 8-25-11: I finally edited it!
Picture The Wind
by Alexander Card
"Picture the wind," said the man in the dark suit. "Picture a soft breeze carrying the scent of summer, of flowers in bloom and fresh earth, rustling trees and tossing kites as children play on the ground below. Picture great cityscapes inhabited by millions of people whose lives are as complex as your own, and see as well small towns and villages full of the same hope, ambition, love, despair, and desperation that you have known.
"Imagine a world finally rid of the needless hate of war, and greed-driven politics. In this world sorrow still exists, but it is an uncommon occurrence; charity is the norm and practically no one is left wanting. Man works to support himself and his community, and in turn his community supports him. Camaraderie and fraternity are not suppressed by boundary of geography or nation. See this clearly."
"Now picture a darkening sky in the middle of day. It seems almost as though the sun has faded, and the air is thick with haze. The haze turns to smoke and the earth begins to reflect the grey of the heavens above; live trees turn to ash and charcoal, the grass wilts and a layer of dust covers everything. Feel the soot coating your tongue and throat, feel the scorch of flames and the pitiless bite of lead. Feel this three-billionfold, and again for the countless who are missing.
"Witness the pain of those damned to survive the onslaught, only to be forced into the cruelest forms of servitude. Theirs is hardly an existence, for they are kept alive in conditions where the air is not fit to breathe, and the water contains an agent which steals more of their will with every sip." The man paused for a moment, adjusting his tie.
"I know it may be difficult for you to comprehend," he said to the frightened-looking couple before him, "but all of what I have described is yet to come, and all of it -- both joy and suffering -- is due to the work of a single man. I was sent here to try to reverse his work." The woman looked to her husband, then back to the man in the suit.
"Even if all of this is true, why are you telling us?" she said.
The man glanced down at his watch impatiently. "Unfortunately I don't have much time left here. The code of my people prevents me from directly intervening in these situations, but I can leave you with this."
Both husband and wife tensed as the man in the suit produced a small, sleek-looking handgun from his jacket pocket, and set it carefully on a table to his side.
"Remember," he said, placing his hat back on his head and turning towards the door. "Every man, no matter how great or cruel, has a mother and father."
A baby boy cooed happily from the next room.
EDIT 8-25-11: I finally edited it!
Picture The Wind
by Alexander Card
"Picture the wind," said the man in the dark suit. "Picture a soft breeze carrying the scent of summer, of flowers in bloom and fresh earth, rustling trees and tossing kites as children play on the ground below. Picture great cityscapes inhabited by millions of people whose lives are as complex as your own, and see as well small towns and villages full of the same hope, ambition, love, despair, and desperation that you have known.
"Imagine a world finally rid of the needless hate of war, and greed-driven politics. In this world sorrow still exists, but it is an uncommon occurrence; charity is the norm and practically no one is left wanting. Man works to support himself and his community, and in turn his community supports him. Camaraderie and fraternity are not suppressed by boundary of geography or nation. See this clearly."
"Now picture a darkening sky in the middle of day. It seems almost as though the sun has faded, and the air is thick with haze. The haze turns to smoke and the earth begins to reflect the grey of the heavens above; live trees turn to ash and charcoal, the grass wilts and a layer of dust covers everything. Feel the soot coating your tongue and throat, feel the scorch of flames and the pitiless bite of lead. Feel this three-billionfold, and again for the countless who are missing.
"Witness the pain of those damned to survive the onslaught, only to be forced into the cruelest forms of servitude. Theirs is hardly an existence, for they are kept alive in conditions where the air is not fit to breathe, and the water contains an agent which steals more of their will with every sip." The man paused for a moment, adjusting his tie.
"I know it may be difficult for you to comprehend," he said to the frightened-looking couple before him, "but all of what I have described is yet to come, and all of it -- both joy and suffering -- is due to the work of a single man. I was sent here to try to reverse his work." The woman looked to her husband, then back to the man in the suit.
"Even if all of this is true, why are you telling us?" she said.
The man glanced down at his watch impatiently. "Unfortunately I don't have much time left here. The code of my people prevents me from directly intervening in these situations, but I can leave you with this."
Both husband and wife tensed as the man in the suit produced a small, sleek-looking handgun from his jacket pocket, and set it carefully on a table to his side.
"Remember," he said, placing his hat back on his head and turning towards the door. "Every man, no matter how great or cruel, has a mother and father."
A baby boy cooed happily from the next room.
laziness: the worst excuse
Okay, internet. You have me feeling guilty. I made this blog with the intention of posting my stories for you all to read and review, but sometimes it takes a while to write a story -- or at least a story worth reading. However, due to my guilty cyber-conscience, I swear that I will have a tidy bit of flash fiction up by this evening, or early tomorrow morning. It may not be nice, it may not be pretty, but it'll be there.
Here's to you all.
P.S. If there's anything you'd like me to write about, let me know! I have plenty of ideas floating about this strange head of mine, but I always appreciate a muse.
Here's to you all.
P.S. If there's anything you'd like me to write about, let me know! I have plenty of ideas floating about this strange head of mine, but I always appreciate a muse.
18 August 2011
sometimes I ask for inspiration
So, between the four comments on this blog, and about a dozen others via email and reddit, I've got a pretty full spectrum of praise and criticism for "Tourists". I really appreciate this. Honestly, the ability to place my unfinished material in a public forum (and subjecting it to your scrutiny) is my primary reason for having this blog, so thank all of you who took the time to read my story. If you took the time to get back to me about it one way or another, you get double thanks.
Moving on....
I'm working on my next story; a short horror piece that will probably come off as a bit Lovecraftian. I'll have that up as soon as I churn out the first draft. Until then, I have an assignment for all of you. In the comment section of this post, tell me what you are most afraid of. Spiders, heights, loneliness, anything will do. I'll be selecting one or more of these and -- hopefully -- will develop a short story based off of it.
Stay thirsty, my friends.
14 August 2011
sometimes I write microfiction
This is a bit of very short fiction I sketched out in a notepad a couple of weeks back. Let me know what you think.
Tourists
by Alexander Card
The girl gazed across the pond as the evening breeze cast ripples over the glassy surface. The boy faced the other way, propped against the railing which ran along the esplanade. The city lights seemed distant tonight. Everything seemed distant, really. After a few moments of silent reflection, he turned to her.
"You alright?" the boy asked, already anticipating her answer.
"Yeah," said the girl, her voice steady and confident. She had promised herself now that the tears were done -- they had been absent for nearly a month now -- and the two of them had come to a quiet acceptance, that she would not allow the cancer spreading throughout her body to affect the boy's life anymore than it already had.
They had known for long enough now, and words that normally brought forth bouts of sobbing, such as "terminal" or "death", no longer affected them. The end seemed more like an imminent visit from an unwelcome relative than the frightening unknown that it had been: a shapeless, pitiless monster whose crooked claws eventually reached from the dark to bring everyone to irrevocable equality.
The girl glanced over at the boy. "Let's go somewhere -- vacation," she said.
"Where?" he asked, turning to look out over the water.
"Wherever."
The boy offered a sad smile to the horizon, and put his hand on the girl's back. "Well, I'm not sure either of us have the money for something like that," he said.
The girl knew this was true. Living in the city wasn't cheap, and after the endless medical bills, neither of their jobs had left them with any real money. She was no longer working at all, and the boy had dropped hours in order to be with her more often.
"Maybe," she said, and reached into her bag. "But I plan on flying for free."
"Hmm?" The boy looked at her in confusion. After rummaging for a short while, the girl produced a tattered library book from the bag, and held it out for the boy to see. He took it from her and read the title out loud.
"Thailand: The Land and Culture. How exactly do you plan on getting us to Thailand?"
She smiled and took his hand, then guided him to a nearby bench. Sitting down, the girl kissed the boy on the mouth with a tenderness that could have almost convinced him that things would be okay, although ultimately he knew that they would not. She pulled his scarf tighter, and whispered in his ear.
"Well, perhaps we could read these books together, and close our eyes and imagine the places, the people, even the food. We could make ourselves the characters in a story that never had a chance to happen. Every week we can go on a different trip, until --"
"Until we've read everything the library has to offer," the boy finished for her. "And then we'll just have to request more."
"I can practically smell the ocean air now," said the girl, closing her eyes with her head on his shoulder.
The boy opened the book and began to read, the words charged with some sort of power as they poured off his lips. Soon they existed in two places at once, tourists not only in the beautiful and enigmatic hills of Thailand, but also in the chilly winter night beneath a leafless oak in the city where they lived.
They returned every night, traveling far and wide together to sample the world's cultures and landscapes, until the girl could no longer make the walk to the bench by the pond. Then the boy visited her each evening in the hospice, and for a few hours would take her from the sterile bed to someplace kinder, warmer, reading even as her eyes shut and he knew she was sleeping.
When the end came, and his travel partner made one last trip -- this time alone -- the boy continued to read the borrowed travel guides. His job had long been abandoned, and thoughts of his own sustenance were absent from his mind. All that mattered were the books which let him retrace his steps, reliving the fantasy he had created with the girl he loved.
As starvation set in, gnawing at his mind and wasting his body, the boy sat on the floor surrounded by candles and stacks of overdue books. As he finished a particularly informative guide to France, he set it aside and reached intuitively for another. Though he could barely read the text, the texture of the faded cover made it clear where he would be traveling next.
An hour later, the boy did not notice when an evening breeze came in through his window and put out several of the candles. He was asleep on the floor, drawing shallow breaths with his head resting on the open book. As his breathing became more infrequent, he found himself walking up a grassy hill. It was noon in Thailand, and the sun shone above in the cloudless sky. As he crested the hill, the boy paused and surveyed the valley below. A tiny village rested by the banks of a river. Villagers hurried about, some of them singing and laughing as they worked.
In the distance, sitting with her feet in the swift currents, was a girl. The boy started down the hill towards her, smiling without quite knowing why. There was something about the girl that seemed familiar, like a well-loved character in a story that hadn't been read in far too long.
Alexander Card
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Alexander Card
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obligatory "Is This Thing On?" starter post
Every once in a while, most people get the urge to jot something down. Sometimes it's merely a thought; a lone idea, while other times it's tiny bit of poetry, or maybe the start of a story. Occasionally a perfectly sane person will develop the utterly insane inclination to write an entire novel. You may have experienced any one of these stirrings. Don't worry, they're completely normal.
Now, there are certain people -- thankfully few -- who are constantly compelled by these unknown forces. We've all seen them, often toting around a notebook, steno pad, or (sigh) a Moleskine. These poor souls never lose the nagging voice in the back of their heads, the one that whispers at them to put pen to paper just once more.
I'm one of THOSE people.
My name's Alex, and this blog is going to be my writing pad, idea generator, and display case. Basically I'm just looking for constructive criticism/commentary on whatever work I post, as well as the occasional unwarranted praise and brutal condemnation.
Let's see what this thing can do...
Now, there are certain people -- thankfully few -- who are constantly compelled by these unknown forces. We've all seen them, often toting around a notebook, steno pad, or (sigh) a Moleskine. These poor souls never lose the nagging voice in the back of their heads, the one that whispers at them to put pen to paper just once more.
I'm one of THOSE people.
My name's Alex, and this blog is going to be my writing pad, idea generator, and display case. Basically I'm just looking for constructive criticism/commentary on whatever work I post, as well as the occasional unwarranted praise and brutal condemnation.
Let's see what this thing can do...
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